Hames

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9 Responses to “Moonscape”

1. on 27 Jun 2009 at 9:08 am1    Jeques

   I like the whimsical feel of imageries you created with your meticulously chosen words in this poem. You achieve to create the drama in a dream-like state bringing the poem’s sentiments forward.

   The effecacy of this poem takes its strength from the enchanting elements of the night that you gathered like in a constellation to effectively make your readers feel everything said and more.

   I wish I would have the time again like before to be sitted in the table to write poems, play around with words to create such an enchanting poetry like this.

   I wish you well.

   ~ Jeques

   
   
2. on 03 Jul 2009 at 5:20 am2    sunsetzens

   hi Marvin!

   “you made me ride, a rocket to the moon!”

   “now, how do i? get back to earth?”- he he he he

   
   
3. on 07 Jul 2009 at 3:34 am3    hames-1977

   jeques,

   the nostalgia and the bitterness of loving someone who is not there anymore is like bitten by the shark’s teeth into your heart. i have tried to capture the intense feeling there is- to struggle with words embracing that moment.

   thanks for your appreciation of this poetry. i just hope that one of these days, we, your readers, can once again read some of your poetry and learn from thereon.

   best of times,
   marvin

   
   
4. on 09 Jul 2009 at 9:50 am4    hames-1977

   zen,

   you’ve got a sense of humor, which is good.
   okay i’ll make a poem about instructions on how to get back to earth safely.

   cheers,
   marvin

   
   
5. on 15 Jul 2009 at 5:30 am5    Gemma

   That final word “moondust” is such a powerful crumbling of dreams! Out of this world poem!

   
   
6. on 16 Jul 2009 at 4:20 am6    sunsetzens

   i’m back Marvin!

   i will wait for that “a poem about instructions on how to get back to earth safely”

   seriously he he he,

   cheers!
   zen

   
   
7. on 16 Jul 2009 at 6:22 am7    hames-1977

   gemma,

   i was actually thinking how to end this poem when i was doing it. i am drawn of making the asteroid as the shattered pieces of a meteor, or tears falling like meteor showers, but they lack such power. and the word moondust just popped out and it make this poem a little more dramatic.

   thanks for such a keen observation. your works also never fail to amaze me.

   best of times,
   marvin

   
   
8. on 16 Jul 2009 at 6:24 am8    hames-1977

   zen,

   well, it would take me some time to bring you a poem on that? seriously.

   hahahaha

   cheers,
   marvin

   
   
9. on 17 Jul 2009 at 4:52 am9    sunsetzens

   ‘just wanted you to know i came back….and read all the answers to my comments here….i’m glad i am making you say “hahahaha”- he he he he

   seriously, no matter how long it will take i will wait for that poem he he he..i’d be so honored he he he

   cheers,
   zen

   
   

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